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17 May 2015 @ 09:06 pm
Just out of curiosity.  
Friends, Romans, Fl*sters, I've been going through all my WIPS and yes there are a few. I stumbled upon my Dragon Fic again, and I can't help but wonder if it's worth carrying on with it. I'll just drop a couple of extracts here, and I want you to tell me if you think i should finish it......

Jared reached out towards him, but froze in place when Jensen’s eyes flew open.  Instead of the familiar golden dappled green, Jared was faced with a pair of emerald green eyes with elliptical pupils. Even more startling was the low threatening growl that came from Jensen, and then a ripping sound as claws tore into the blanket.

Jared moved quickly he pulled Jensen close to him and held tight.  He struggled to hold onto Jensen as he writhed, Jared felt bones twist and crack beneath his fingers. Jensen suddenly hunched over in his arms, a guttural growl escaped before turning to a whimper his breathing shallow and rapid.

As Jensen panted he felt his skin ripple and split. His back was slick with blood, and he could no longer stand his nightshirt against his skin. He desperately tore at the thin material, ripping it to shreds, sighing in relief when the excruciating pressure was gone.

Jared looked at the rents in the nightshirt and swore softly under his breath, as he saw the skin beneath.  It was raw and bleeding as scales started to appear and muscles strained under Jensen’s shoulders blades as if something was trying to force its way through the torn flesh. “Damn it no, not now Jensen. I should never have brought meat in here.” Jared moved swiftly and pinned the smaller man to the bed, Jared took hold of Jensen’s wrists tightly to stop Jensen clawing at himself with the talons that emerged from elongated fingers. Jared used his greater height and weight to his advantage pressing Jensen into the bed.

Then later I really go for the soppy romance thing.....

“Jensen to dragons the gender of our mate is unimportant, they can be male or female. A mate is the other half of our heart, our heart song.  And the day I came to the castle with my father, I heard that song, it was clear and pure and nothing would have kept me from it.  When I entered the throne room and saw you, the song grew louder and you were everything my heart yearned for.  You are beautiful both inside and out.  As for carrying on the family line, I have many brothers and sisters can do that for me. Such matters are trifling and are not important to us dragons, we have learned to see the world very differently, to men.”

*Shuffles nervously* Well what do you think? Is it worth carrying on or should I let it go. i think it needs proof reading for plot before i go any further. Help!
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milly_galmilly_gal on May 17th, 2015 09:04 pm (UTC)
....*opens her inbox* and KEEP GOING!!!

Xx
sasha_dragonsasha_dragon on May 25th, 2015 06:32 pm (UTC)
Hi there, right I'm trying to play catch up with my inbox(when I've figured out how to use it properly)then I'll sort out a version of the fic, with what I've got so far.

You've been warned *G*
milly_galmilly_gal on May 26th, 2015 07:41 pm (UTC)
I am fully warned, battened down and prepared, not hit me! :D
JJ1564jj1564 on May 17th, 2015 09:44 pm (UTC)
Keep going, PLEASE keep going! I LOVE these snippets!
sasha_dragonsasha_dragon on May 25th, 2015 06:33 pm (UTC)
Thank you, looks like I'll keep going then.
JJ1564jj1564 on May 25th, 2015 08:01 pm (UTC)
Hoorah!
kristophorioskristophorios on May 18th, 2015 12:48 am (UTC)
pulls up a chair.....leans forward...I will be hear waiting.
sasha_dragonsasha_dragon on May 25th, 2015 06:34 pm (UTC)
*G* Don't get too comfortable, you know how long it takes me to write anything.
annabuffy: Spring Catannabuffy on May 18th, 2015 12:25 pm (UTC)
But it's a J2 dragon fic with schmoop and a happy ending! Of course you have to finish it and post it. ;p
sasha_dragonsasha_dragon on May 25th, 2015 06:35 pm (UTC)
That sounds like a good enough reason to carry on, looks like there'll be dragons in my future.
ferrous_wheelerferrous_wheeler on May 18th, 2015 07:05 pm (UTC)
Oooh! Intriguing! I'd love to read more! :)
sasha_dragonsasha_dragon on May 25th, 2015 06:36 pm (UTC)
I'm getting the hint this will be worth continuing with. I'll just finish up some editing and see what happens.
Somersomer on May 18th, 2015 08:00 pm (UTC)
Is it worth carrying on?

Is that a trick question?? *side eyes you* I'm pretty sure it is. WOMAN, I SWEAR, IF YOU DON'T CONTINUE THIS I WILL KICK YOUR ASS (lovingly, of course, but there will be ass kicking) *runs away*
sasha_dragonsasha_dragon on May 25th, 2015 06:39 pm (UTC)
*Ducks behind Jensen* Ok I can take a hint! Right carrying on, but first I need to finish editing, a cracky little piece of J2 porny fluff.
denise_42denise_42 on May 20th, 2015 11:45 am (UTC)
I would like to read more, it sounds good. Please write some more.
sasha_dragonsasha_dragon on May 25th, 2015 06:41 pm (UTC)
Ok, it looks like I'll be carrying on with this, but to be honest it's not going to be a hardship *G*.